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高考英语满分作文赏析

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  高考英语满分作文赏析(一)

  Mrs. Wilson,

  I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this change.

  Yours,

  Li Hua

  [名师点评]

  本文属于提纲式要点作文,是学生比较熟悉的题材,体现了英语学习应该注意实用性,生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确,各个要点间逻辑连贯,行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译,而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句,因此要仔细组织语言,合理安排结构。在语言方面,要特别注意简洁明了,开头要开门见山。

  高考英语满分作文赏析(二)

  Dear Sir/Madam,

  Greetings from China!

  I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

  By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.

  Yours truly,

  Li Hua

  【名师点评】本文写作的内容要点如下:

  1.自我介绍;2.信息来源;3.祝贺生日;4.感谢照顾;5.索取照片;6.合适的结尾。

  这封信格式正确,行文规范,描述有条不紊,称呼、正文中的开头及结尾、结束语均表达到位。文章行文活泼,感情真挚,语言表述准确,洋溢着作者因大熊猫得到精心照顾而对美方人员的感激之情,以及希望自己愿望成真,得到照片的希冀之情。长短句运用合理,结合了简单句和复合句,流畅自然,不露痕迹,的确是一篇佳作。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1.delighted adj.欣喜的,快乐的2.express v.表达 3.give birth to v.产生,生育

  好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.

  我祝福它生日快乐并且对你们的辛勤工作表达我的感激之情,正是你们的努力工作让苏琳和它的父母在美国过着幸福和健康的生活。

  高考英语满分作文赏析(三)

  Dear Sir,

  I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan, P.R. China. Ten days after that, it didn’t ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. I had no choice but to go to the repairman. To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that for I can not wait that long. Therefore, I have to require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month.

  Thank you for your consideration.

  Sincerely yours,

  Bu Manyi

  【名师点评】

  本文内容要点齐全,语言丰富,结构合理,如头两句说明了购买手机后发现故障的情况,中间部分说明了无法维修而必须让公司更换手机的原委,最后明确提出自己的要求,明白流畅,将题目所提出的要点全部表达清楚,较好的完成了任务。全文以一般过去时为基调,结合主动语态与被动语态,并使用了so, but, therefore 等连接词,使文章结构完整严密。固定短语,如be sold out ,at least, had no choice but to go, to my disappointment, on hearing that 等的使用,使文章的语言显得地道而精炼。

  积累卡片英汉互译

  好词1. disappointment n.失望 2.desperate adj.绝望的 3. consideration n.体谅

  好句To my disappointment ,he said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.

  令我失望的是,他说因为在中国是新款手机,所以没有配件来修理。

  评析:复杂句的组织; to my disappointment, 常用短语。

  高考英语满分作文赏析(四)

  Good afternoon, everyone,

  The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10:00a.m.~11:00a.m.on April 29,2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.

  The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.

  In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!

  Thank you!

  【名师点评】

  本文的结构十分明晰,同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段,前两段叙述,后一段发表观点,典型的作文结构。在句式使用上,作者用法多样,使用了独立结构和虚拟语气,十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。

  积累卡片

  好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡

  好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.

  教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动,能够健康地活50年。

  评析:advocate,其后接虚拟语气,可以省略情态动词。

  2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldn’t be able to get good study records.

  如果我们不进行运动,我们的学习成绩就不会很好。


 
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